It's that time again where writers share 8-10 sentences from their writing. I'm continuing on with my story of Caroline. I love writing the thrust and parry between hero and heroine, where they're not ready to admit their attraction to the other party.
Georgiana’s soft laugh brought Caroline's attention back to her and Lord Nathan. She longed to have the same undivided attention. Evidently sensing her study of him, he shifted his gaze toward her. She couldn’t look away, although her mind and senses urged her to. As if her thoughts were on display, like words on parchment, his mouth quirked at one corner and he inclined his head.
Her face flamed and prickles of heat threatened to turn her cheeks an unbecoming pink. As a precautionary measure, she snapped open her fan. The gold pomander on her wrist swayed with each flick of her wrist, setting off a pleasant aroma of her favorite rose water. She allowed the familiar scent to soothe her. It wouldn’t do for Lord Nathan to know he discomposed her.
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I have a suspicion he already knows he's "discomposed" her! I agree- this is always the fun part.
ReplyDeleteLoved all the details, especially the pomander! Great snippet...
ReplyDeleteBeautiful sensory details. I especially liked the sentence beginning with "As if her thoughts were on display..."
ReplyDeleteI agree with the others about the details. Excellent use of the senses.
ReplyDeleteI think he has a pretty good idea how discomposed she is! Nice scene. Very flirty and sensual with details.
ReplyDeleteThere is fine line between wanted attention and unwanted. All about the timing.
ReplyDeleteI get the sense that he's just beginning to tease her. ;)
ReplyDeleteSplendid snippet, Sue. Your use of 'discomposed' had me smiling. I enjoyed the info about the pomander. I had no idea they worked like that!
ReplyDeleteI envisioned a gold filigree charm with the rose water pomander placed inside.
DeleteWonderful scene. I really enjoyed the details.
ReplyDeleteHa! Indeed! It would never do to have Lord Nathan know such a thing! Wonderful writing. I'm hooked.
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